fuyuehe
亲爱的success2009 老师您好，麻烦帮我看下我的标题：
原来是：The Impact of ClinicalCharacter,HistopathologicalFeatures and Therapeutic Measures on Prognosis in 94 Cases Pure MucinousBreast Carcinoma
后来改成：The Prognostic Value of the Clinicopathological Characteristics in PureMucinous Breast Carcinoma: a Study from West China
我写的是有关乳腺粘液腺癌临床病理特征及各种治疗对预后的影响，通过回顾性数据分析，得出统计学意义的预后因素。人群是针对华西地区的患者。

viphere wrote:
请教lz

Research highlights provided should consist of a short collection of 3 to 5 bullet points that convey the core findings of the article. Each bullet point should not exceed a maximum of 85 characters including spaces.

我已近仔细检查过了，我写了五点 1-5； 请问高手们，85 characters 和bullet points 是什么意思？Elsevier提供的，谁能指点迷经呀？谢谢！！

fuyuehe
success2009 老师您好，看了您的意见，改成：Prognostic Value of the Clinicopathological Characteristics and Therapeutic Measures in Pure Mucinous Breast Carcinoma: a Study from West China 如何？

1、我写的是纯粘液腺癌，是Pure Mucinous Breast Carcinoma
2、其他人写的类似的文章，都谈到了治疗对预后的影响，但文题上只字未提，后来我看了一些写文章的经验上说，文章标题写主要的，其次的可以在关键词里提现。我在文中统计评价了手术方式、化疗、放疗、内分泌治疗对预后的影响，那么这里的标题上选哪个词语比较合适呢？therapeutic measures ； therapeutic methods ； treatment patterns ；或者 treatment model ？

送我丁当 wrote:
success2009 老师您好，我刚刚给我新的论文拟了个Title: Influence of lentinan on Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell genes of T lymphocytes from T lymphocytes from chronic radiation stress injury mouse.
我感觉结构不大正确，还请老师您给指点指点。还有各位战友也给我提提意见。
该标题的汉语意思是：香菇多糖对慢性辐射应激损伤小鼠T淋巴细胞上的Kv1.3, CRAC以及Clswell3种通道基因表达情况的影响

送我丁当
success2009 老师您好，下面我传上的是我的论文题目和摘要部分，还请 success2009 老师帮我好好看看，之处其中的不足。
题目是：Different expression patterns of Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell genes in response to lentinan on T lymphocytes injury in chronic radiation stress mouse

题目有点长，修改Different expression 应该为：differential
lentinan on T lymphocytes 不知何意？

Abstract Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell are three important ion channels in T lymphocytes. To investigate the mechanism of protective effects of lentinan on T lymphocytes injury in chronic radiation stress mouse, we have determined different expression profiles of Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell genes. T lymphocytes were purified by nylon wool fiber columns with simple technical procedure and rapid isolation from mouse spleen. And then mRNA were extracted with StarSpin animal mRNA kit from T lymphocytes. Lastly, RT-PCR was operated for detecting the expression patterns of Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell genes. RT-PCR revealed the expression of Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell mRNA in the isolated T lymphocytes. Different genes have different expression levels in T lymphocytes of one mouse. Moreover, one gene has different expression levels in T lymphocytes from mice of different groups. Therefore, our results confirm that influence of lentinan on expression patterns of Kv1.3, CRAC and Clswell genes in T lymphocytes from chronic radiation stress mice.

红字部分语法和搭配以及时态均有问题，整个段落逻辑混乱，需要重写。

spnw
success2009老师您好，下面我的论文摘要部分，还请老师帮我好好看看,第一次写SCI，见笑了！望success2009斧正！先行谢谢了！
AIM: To investigate the effects of A on modulation of pro-inflammatory and anti-inflammatory cytokines and immune response inacute dss-induced colitis and the mechanism of it in the treatment of acute colitis in mouse.

Materials and methods：Mice were fed DSS for 7 days while infused i.p with repeated doses of A(20mg/kg) in PBS or PBS only for three days as the start of the DSS exposure. Clinical,macroscopical and microscopical assessment of colitis severity with survival study was performed.Colonic TNF-a expression and production of IFN, IL-10 and IL-1 were also analyzed.

.Results：Administration of A attenuates the severity of acute DSS-induced colitis,A-treated mice experienced less bleeding, weight loss and loss of stool consistency compared with PBS-treated mice ,the disease activity score was significantly lower inthe A mice versus PBS control group（P<0.05）. In accordancewith the clinical data, certain gross and histologicalparameters also favoured the A-treated mice suggesting less severe disease.或者In accordance with the clinical data,A-treatedmice expressed decreased mononuclear cell numbers inmesenteric lymphnodes (MLNs) and colonic lamina propria (LP), and reduced proteins and mRNA levels of TNF-α and IFN-γ, less MPO activity and lower DAI level(P < 0.05).

Conclusions: A is an anti-metabolic and immunosuppressive agent which can minimize the abnormal immune cytokine response and relieve the pathophysiological disorders associated with experimental acute colitis.

送我丁当
今天是教师节，在这里祝success2009 老师您节日快乐。
下面在这里我就摘要的问题进行解释并提出我的问题，一点首先是on T lymphocytes injury，我想表达的是作用在T淋巴细胞损伤。一点是chronic radiation stress mouse，我想表达的是慢性辐射应激小鼠。在逻辑上的问题，可能是我在摘要中的实验方法的描述中存在描述的问题，这次的修改中我增加了一部分的实验描述。希望在您看来有所进步。谢谢！

Abstract As is known for us, Kv1.3, KCa3.1, Orai1, STIM1, TRPM7 and Clswell are six important ion channels in T lymphocytes. To investigate the mechanism of protective effects of lentinan on T lymphocytes injury in chronic radiation stress mouse, we determined the differential expression profiles of Kv1.3, KCa3.1, Orai1, STIM1, TRPM7 and Clswell genes. The mice were injected with different concentrations of lentinan before exposuring to 60Co γ-ray. Differences in gene expression were detected before and after treatment. T lymphocytes were purified by nylon wool fiber columns with simple technical procedure and rapid isolation from murine spleen. Then mRNA was extracted by StarSpin animal mRNA kit from T lymphocytes. Lastly, RT-PCR was performed for detecting the expression level of Kv1.3, KCa3.1, Orai1, STIM1, TRPM7 and Clswell genes. RT-PCR revealed the expression of Kv1.3, KCa3.1, Orai1, STIM1, TRPM7 and Clswell mRNA in the isolated T lymphocytes. Different genes have different expression levels in T lymphocytes of one mouse. Moreover, one gene has different expression levels in T lymphocytes from mice of different groups. Our results suggested that lentinan can influence the expression patterns of Kv1.3, KCa3.1, Orai1, STIM1, TRPM7 and Clswell genes in T lymphocytes from chronic radiation stress mice.